Something’s wrong around beat 4, but I can’t tell exactly what it is
I'm not sure what you mean by "beat 4". But the longer you played the groove, the more it became sketchy and a little disjointed. Meaning you just need to practice it more so you can do it with more consistency. I'd say the first several bars were pretty darn good. Keep at it. That's not an easy one to do.
Is this funkier? I’m hitting the 2 and 4 harder.
Can’t help but notice, you look like a tall guy that sits lower.
Sounds better than first take ?. Are the snares off? What are you playing on?
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